Blog 6

Part 1:

The writing tutorial this week was basically the exact same as last week. Each group member brought in a piece of writing from a different class; we split into our two separate groups and began revising. Once we finished our revisions, we discussed why we made the changes we did with everyone and then moved on to the next set of papers.

Part 2:

The Securities Commission is New Zealand’s main regulator of investments. The Securities Commission was created under the Securities Act of 1978., It and it is an independent crown entity. The Commission is required to cooperate with overseas security commissions, advise the Minister of Commerce on conduct rules proposed by security exchanges, and to promote public understanding of the law and practice of securities, among a variety of other things. In order to be able to perform all of these functions, the commission is given numerous powers. They can receive evidence regarding security law a practices, cancel or suspend registered prospects, as well as carry out inspections, as recommend future regulatory ideas. By having these securities enforced, it ensures outside states that they can be confident when trading with, and investing with, the country of New Zealand (Securities Commission, 2009).

Part 3:

For the paragraph I decided to revise, I mostly added some transitions to make the sentences flow a little better. The first revision I made simply added a  ', and' in order to make it a compound sentence. For my second revision, I decided to cut out some unneeded information and add a transitional phrase to bring some closure to the sentence. Overall this chapter didn't confuse me in any way. I did like the section on the normalization of sentences though, and how it can make an idea more cohesive.

Blog 5

Part 1:

For my group tutorial this week, I had my first experience with a group paper revision. We were split into two groups, read the papers of the other group, and then proceeded to complete a quick revision. After revising the other groups paper, we would explain what revisions we made and why we made them. The other group would do the same thing for our groups papers. I noticed that depending on what different people are majoring in, the writing styles vary drastically. For example, one of the students in the group had an entire paper that did nothing but explain a single math problem. It was an entirely different form of writing and it caught the rest of us off guard. Another student had a paper written in the form of a news paper interview. Having never had to work with papers in these different formats made it quite challenging to edit them.

Part 2:

"Distinctly different from the previous theory are the ideas of Homer. According to him, Aphrodite was the daughter of Zeus and Dione (Sacks 28). In Aphrodite and the Dione Myth, George Depue Hadzsits reviews the writings of Homer in an effort to determine how exactly the myth was created and believed. He concludes that Dione and Aphrodite must have been linked as  were mother and daughter because of the many qualities they have in common. Dione was said to have a “well recognized affiliation with moisture, including, rain, stream and sea” (Hadzsits 46). Therefore, it would seem only natural that its logical that she would be the mother of Aphrodite, who’s name means ‘foam-born,’ and is associated with the sea. " 

There weren't any portions of this chapter that I found hard to understand. I really liked how it talked about eliminating uncertainty from papers by making sure different hedge words couple well. The example given in the book used both seem and clear in a single sentence. Those are two conflicting ideas, and it causes confusion for the reader. If something is  "seems'' a certain way, then it isn't going to be clear. The word clear is a statement of fact, and therefore should only be used when its meaning is undeniable.  I also liked how the chapter focused on eliminating fluff from papers and using words that are more direct and evocative. Rather than using extremely angry, use livid or furious. It just makes a paper more interesting and to the point. 

Part 3:

The other group would do the same thing for our groups papers. I noticed that depending on what different people are majoring in areas of study, the writing styles vary drastically. For example, one of the students in the group had an entire paper that did nothing but explained a single math problem. It was an entirely different form of writing and it caught the rest of us off guard. Another student had a paper written in the form of a newspaper interview.

For my first revision, I decided to change the wording to make the sentence more to the point as well as shorten it. The second revision I did was for the same reason. The part of the sentence I eliminated added no significance to the sentence. It was basically just a bunch of filler words.