Blog 6

Part 1:

The writing tutorial this week was basically the exact same as last week. Each group member brought in a piece of writing from a different class; we split into our two separate groups and began revising. Once we finished our revisions, we discussed why we made the changes we did with everyone and then moved on to the next set of papers.

Part 2:

The Securities Commission is New Zealand’s main regulator of investments. The Securities Commission was created under the Securities Act of 1978., It and it is an independent crown entity. The Commission is required to cooperate with overseas security commissions, advise the Minister of Commerce on conduct rules proposed by security exchanges, and to promote public understanding of the law and practice of securities, among a variety of other things. In order to be able to perform all of these functions, the commission is given numerous powers. They can receive evidence regarding security law a practices, cancel or suspend registered prospects, as well as carry out inspections, as recommend future regulatory ideas. By having these securities enforced, it ensures outside states that they can be confident when trading with, and investing with, the country of New Zealand (Securities Commission, 2009).

Part 3:

For the paragraph I decided to revise, I mostly added some transitions to make the sentences flow a little better. The first revision I made simply added a  ', and' in order to make it a compound sentence. For my second revision, I decided to cut out some unneeded information and add a transitional phrase to bring some closure to the sentence. Overall this chapter didn't confuse me in any way. I did like the section on the normalization of sentences though, and how it can make an idea more cohesive.